Friday, April 17, 2009

Your Poems

The poems you never saw
to write them would make me raw
inside
scraped out like a d&c, the womb
to become a tomb
inside

The poems you never read
would take the last drop I bled
dry
siphoned till the veins
collapse, drained
dry

The poems you never knew
could exist only for you
buried
in the bottom of a box
in my soul, locked
buried

13 comments:

  1. excellent poem, so powerful :-)

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  2. i liked the last part the most.

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  3. Thank you, BitchyAngel. I looked at your site. Love it!

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  4. I especially like the line: "the womb to become a tomb inside."

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  5. Liz, Thanks. It's not a good feeling, but it fit when I wrote the poem. I'm into nature, too, and I really like your blog.

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  6. Sarah, I looked at your blogs after I responded to your comment last night. I really liked them. It feels good to branch out and be around people. Thanks!

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  7. Wow, well written, and quite engaging – bravo… ;)
    …rob

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  8. Thanks, rob. I appreciate the comment. Your blog is very serene.

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  9. WOW...thats it WOW...and keep writing

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  10. Thanks, Wayne. Your paintings are very good. Your sense of humor is stunningly wicked!

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  11. I REALLY like how you did this. The form is excellent. Repeating the same thing was a stroke of brilliance. And the lines between....I bow to you!

    http://lori102870.blogspot.com/2009/04/had-it-been-snake-it-wouldve-bitten.html

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  12. No, Lori! you are awesome to say that though. I have had much fun meeting more people the last couple of days. There are a lot of good writers in the world. You are one. And I really liked your post. =)

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